Talk:Female infertility

Unencyclopaedic?

IMPOV, the text below which I moved here seems rather encyclopaedic - a more systematic study on the issue may be required as a reference before reinsertion. Mikael Häggström (talk) 12:24, 4 January 2010 (UTC)

Because of media stories about celebrities having babies in their 40's, frequently without public knowledge that donor eggs (and thus somebody else's DNA) may have been used, even medical doctors have been mislead into believing they can wait longer than they should to have children and have had to see fertility specialists as a result: “I have doctors, I have PhDs, I have lawyers, I have very intelligent, educated women in my office every day who tell me, 'But I eat right and I exercise, and I'm healthy. How could I not be able to have a child?'”

Sherman Silbe claims

If nobody objects, I'm going to remove that paragraph - from : "Fertility specialist and book author Dr. Sherman Silber [18] states, in a message to women ...", his claims appear to be an obvious exaggeration i.e that 25% of women who are currently trying to conceive are infertile etc - the most cited figure is 10%- at most 15%; all his claims are also not based on any study/reliable source and appear to be just his opinion; they're also contradicted by most reliable sources; and more importantly this is giving undue weight (WP:UNDUE) to him. You can't just start quoting every person who has written a book about how to get pregnant. 188.25.163.145 (talk) 12:13, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

I've removed it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 188.25.163.236 (talk) 12:32, 9 January 2012 (UTC)

i am not abal to have a child at age 40 — Preceding unsigned comment added by 203.104.11.4 (talk) 23:36, 22 November 2012 (UTC)

Society and culture section

Hi, I'm looking to add to the society and culture section of this page. I'm a student at Rice University interested in health. If you have questions, comments, or concerns, let me know on my talk page. AllyBremer (talk) 02:27, 9 October 2013 (UTC)

New additions

Hi,

This is Ally, I've recently made some edits to the society and culture page on this article. I hope that the additions made will help contribute to an overall more balanced article. The edits I have made involve the world approach to female infertility, a growing global concern. I will continue to edit this page for my class, and hope that they will help to increase the rating and traffic to this site. I am open to suggestions and advice if you are willing to help and contribute. If you have questions, concerns, or comments, please let me know on my talk page. AllyBremer (talk) 22:37, 20 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for a good start to developing this article!

In the section called "Polygamy and adultery", you start by saying "Men tend to find another wife when their first cannot produce a child, hoping by sleeping with more women that he will be able to produce his own child". Wikipedia is an international publication - could you narrow this statement or section to refer to a particular demographic? You say this happens in "African societies" - is this common in all of Africa? Also, can you think of a better title than "Polygamy and adultery" if you intend for this section to not have an international focus? My first thought coming to this was that this was not what I expected to be said for most of Africa. Thanks. Blue Rasberry (talk) 00:02, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for the feedback! I've made some early changes, and will continue to revise for the next few weeks. AllyBremer (talk) 01:53, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

It seemed strange to me that this would only be an African phenomenon, and a little search shows that it's not. Books like this one suggest that at least thinking about adultery is a pretty common response in Western cultures, too. It may be that this is more common when couples know whose "fault" the infertility is. WhatamIdoing (talk) 15:18, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

• I absolutely agree that this is not simply a "African phenomenon", and will correct the neutrality of my wording as appropriate. I also understand that this issue affects women around the world, and I am simply giving examples of specific locations. I will incorporate a global approach as I continue writing and editing. Thanks! AllyBremer (talk) 20:09, 5 November 2013 (UTC)

Peer Review

The contributions made to this article are significant. However, I have a few sugguestions for improving these contributions. The "Prevalence" section provides information from only one source. This is very limited. The section would benefit greatly and gain credibility if it were to acknowledge claims and information from multiple sources. Additionally, the readability of the article could be improved by more clearly connecting claims and information, especially between paragraphs. Lastly, I would suggest proofreading your article, there are a couple of minor errors that will be easily caught and corrected by additional proofreading. Overall, a very impressive and well developed contribution. Brookeethleen (talk) 00:46, 7 November 2013 (UTC)

Comments and Suggestions

AllyBremer, You have made great revisions! I have a few suggestions for improvement:

• Under the Prevalence section, I think subsections regarding each region could be added to provide further clarification related to each area of prevalence. If possible, statistical evidence over each region would also be helpful.
• Also, I think the Society and Culture section could be split between something related to social expectations and another section for implications for women.

Other than that, you have made great additions to this article!

JOzuna25 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 01:38, 7 November 2013 (UTC)

TA Comments

Hi AllyBremer! Great job researching for your contribution - you've added a lot of important info. You actually don't need to put in-text citations though, the footnote citations are sufficient. In your Social Stigma section, have you considered moving the wealth & inheritance paragraph to its own subsection? It's not necessary, but I thought that it doesn't mesh as well with the other info in that section and it's an important issue to highlight.

I'd also suggest you make some grammatical edits, particularly trying to convert passive voice to active voice (like "the ball was thrown to her" --> "he threw her the ball"). Also, the word "this" isn't a noun so make sure you use it as an adjective preceding a noun. Let me know if you have any questions! Best of luck with the edits! Nadhika99 (talk) 04:48, 19 November 2013 (UTC)