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Planned Revisions
I'm planning on revising and expanding this article as part of my Poverty, Justice and Human Capabilities course at Rice University and I would appreciate any feedback on my planned changes. I'm interested in this subject because I'm studying international relations and development issues. Well-executed peacebuilding creates a sustainable peace after conflict by addressing the root causes of the fighting and by helping repair the damage to the whole society, making it an important topic in both international relations and development.
The current article is a stub with no sections and no references. The content does not include any explanation of the circumstances that necessitate peacebuilding, history of peacebuilding efforts, analysis of their effectiveness, case studies or criticisms of peacebuilding. Although it mentions UN Peacebuilding Fund projects and the 2010 report on their impact as well as the UNSC report on the role of women in peacebuilding, it does not provide any detail on these topics. In addition, all of the information in the article comes from peacebuilding organizations- none comes from scholarly articles or research papers with an outside perspective.
I plan to rectify these issues by adding sections about the problems caused by war, the history of peacebuilding, results, ongoing efforts and criticisms of peacebuilding. These sections will be detailed and reference diverse sources including outside research reports and scholarly articles. I will also expand the existing discussion of UN efforts and the role of women in peacebuilding. The results section will include case studies, although I have yet to determine which countries would be the best case studies to discuss. Does anyone have suggestions?
I would really appreciate any feedback, particularly about the national peacebuilding efforts on which I should focus. Thanks! Nadhika99 (talk) 05:28, 9 March 2012 (UTC)
- I just posted my initial revisions to the article in the mainspace. The History, Role of women, Ongoing efforts, Results and Criticisms sections are all works in progress. I would appreciate any feedback about the content I've posted so far and the sections on which I'm working. Thanks! Nadhika99 (talk) 21:56, 2 April 2012 (UTC)
Peer-Review
The edits to this entry are very well organized. I have a couple of suggestions though:
1. In the 'components' section add something about the components of pre-conflict peace building since you note that as the main distinguishing factor between peace building and peace keeping.
2. The ongoing efforts section needs a reference. I am sure UN documents would provide a good source. Also you should mention in the section heading that this part refers specifically to the ongoing efforts of UN Peacebuilding Commission.
Overall, this is very well written article with excellent referencing. Kjhooda (talk) 03:19, 8 April 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for your comments! For #1, all of the information I have thus far found about efforts that meet the definition of pre-conflict peacebuilding are not called peacebuilding, they're called other things (conflict prevention, crisis prevention, etc.). I am looking for more information about components of pre-conflict peacebuilding that go by the name peacebuilding, but if I don't find them I will use the conflict prevention information. For #2, I added the references. I would like to include other organizations' efforts as well, although I may end up requesting that someone else do it on the talk page depending on my time. Nadhika99 (talk) 03:57, 11 April 2012 (UTC)
Review
Your article has a lot of information; I really liked the section where you differentiate between peacemaking, conflict resolution, and peacekeeping. First, does peacebuilding only exist within a nation? Maybe add that in your short intro paragraph. Second, your chart is amazing! It really helps with the content. Lastly, I can’t wait to read your sections that are still in progress. Are you including the New Deal in your history section? Also, do you have anything about the [[hegemonic approach]] of foreign policy? QuincyC (talk) 01:15, 11 April 2012 (UTC)
- Thank for your comments!! It is specific to one nation- I added that to the first sentence of the lead. I'm not including the New Deal because it wasn't an outside intervention and didn't follow violent conflict, so it's not peacebuilding. One of the criticisms I'm including is the idea that peacebuilding is a new type of mission civilatrice, a concept related to issues of cultural hegemony and power projection. Nadhika99 (talk) 03:57, 11 April 2012 (UTC)
Review #3
You have a solid introduction, and I agree with Quincy that I appreciate that you defended why peacebuilding is a distinct field. Also I really like the chart you made under the components of peacebuilding, as it makes it very easy to read, but you might want to add a citation for that. Your [7] citation is kind of in an awkward spot, not sure if that was just a typo or something. You have lots of information on governmental organizations and NGOs, which is very good. I guess I might also suggest that you list the ongoing efforts in bullet points, to make it easier to read, but this is not necessary by any means. I think you need to expand on the results section, however. Overall, I think you did a good job at offering a lot of good information on this topic of peacebuilding.
ChloeCBlaskiewicz (talk) 02:49, 11 April 2012 (UTC)ChloeCBlaskiewicz
- Thanks for your comments! The chart citation is the one at the end of the previous paragraph. I'm not really sure where else I could put it, I'll ask. I moved the [7] citation. I'm planning on adding more detail to both the ongoing efforts and results sections, so I'll format the ongoing efforts section then. Nadhika99 (talk) 04:05, 11 April 2012 (UTC)