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Jimi Hendrix

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Nominator(s): GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:23, 7 December 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this article for FAC because I believe it to be well-written, well-researched, comprehensive, neutral, and stable. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:23, 7 December 2013 (UTC)

• Support - I GA reviewed this with FA in mind, and therefore don't have much to add. Some sources have dates in addition to year as well, I'm not sure if these should be made consistent with the rest, that don't. It seems his alleged children have been cut, they would probably warrant at least a footnote. FunkMonk (talk) 02:11, 22 December 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your support Funk Monk! There is an endnote regarding his progeny, see nb#32. After looking at the sources I only see one magazine article with a full date (Morello), and its my understanding that periodicals should include a full date when one is available. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 17:08, 22 December 2013 (UTC)

I think I've heard about a daughter as well (I'm aware the son is transsexual, but it should be another person), anything to that? As for dates, again, not sure if it is a problem, but the month is also listed in at least Fairchild, Michael (April 1991), GP staff (May 2012), and Owen, Frank; Reynolds, Simon (April 1991). FunkMonk (talk) 17:43, 22 December 2013 (UTC)

I'm not aware of any WP:RSs for a Hendrix daughter. Those others sources you mentioned are also periodicals, and as far as I know, if a periodical has a month or date available, then they should be included; I might be wrong though. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 17:48, 22 December 2013 (UTC)

• Comments - taiking a look now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:00, 23 December 2013 (UTC)

In 1958, Hendrix completed his studies at Washington Junior High School; he did not graduate from Garfield High School - I'd slot a contrastive here, such as ", though" rather than semicolon. Just a bit stilted as is.

Done. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 18:44, 23 December 2013 (UTC)

at his girlfriend, Betty Jean Morgan's house in Seattle - comma makes it scan oddly - I'd remove it...

Done. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 18:44, 23 December 2013 (UTC)

NB: two "guitar"s in the sentence...can we remove one?

Done. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 18:44, 23 December 2013 (UTC)

He toured with them through mid-1964, when he quit after a gig in Nashville - leaves me wondering why......can we add?

Done. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 18:44, 23 December 2013 (UTC)

• Support on comprehensiveness and prose - not finding much to complain about at all....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:32, 24 December 2013 (UTC)

Comments from Quadell

What a fascinating character; I'm so glad this was nominated. The prose is excellent.

• I'm not fond of the wording "He headlined the Woodstock Festival in 1969 and the Isle of Wight Festival in 1970 as the world's highest-paid performer". (He wasn't headlines as "Jimi Hendrix: The world's highest-paid performer".)
  • Does this edit address your concern? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:42, 29 December 2013 (UTC)
    • It does, thanks. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:57, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• Comma stuff:
  • Like nearly all FACs, many places in the article use the serial comma (e.g. "Are You Experienced, Axis: Bold as Love, and Electric Ladyland"), but a few places omit it (e.g. "emotions, spirituality and music"). MOS:SERIAL says "Editors may use either convention on Wikipedia so long as each article is consistent within itself."
    • I'll do my best to find the missing serial commas, but it can be a bit difficult in an article of this size (my eyes aren't what they used to be), so I would appreciate any specific examples that you are willing to give. I have no idea where "emotions, spirituality and music" is located. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:42, 29 December 2013 (UTC)

      If I find any more omissions, I'll add the serial comma. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:57, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

      • Thanks! GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

  • Per MOS:COMMA, when a date is formatted as "November 27, 1942", the year is acting as a parenthetic, and needs a comma after it as well as before it (unless it ends the sentece). This is usually done correctly, but like most FACs, it's a problem in a few places.
    • I only found one that was lacking a comma, but I'll look for more. Again, I would greatly appreciate any specific examples. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:42, 29 December 2013 (UTC)

      That might have been the only such problem. I'll keep an eye out. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:57, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Thanks! GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• I suspect it should be "Hendrix's cousin" rather than "Hendrix cousin" in note 4.
  • Fixed. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:42, 29 December 2013 (UTC)

• Why is "Utee" in quotes? (What is "Utee"?) If it's a backup band or stage name, I don't think quotes are needed, and if it's another single, I think the wording is confusing.
  • "Utee" is the name of the song that was included on the single's B-side. Does this edit resolve your concern? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:38, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

    Did Hendrix play on Utee as well? If so, I'd probably word it as "she invited him to participate in a recording session for her single 'My Diary', and on its B-side, 'Utee'." (I'm not sure if there's a standard or not for Single / B-side listings.) If he didn't play on "Utee", then I don't think the B-side is worth mentioning, personally. – Quadell ^(talk) 18:53, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Yes, Hendrix played on both tracks. This is made clear in the following sentence: "He played guitar on both tracks, which also included background vocals by Arthur Lee." Do you still think that this need to be clarified? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 19:13, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Ah, so it is, sorry. This may be a product of my age, but I would not have known that 'her single "My Diary"/"Utee"' refers to the A-side and B-side of the single. If that's a standard way of naming singles and B-sides in other FAs, then that's fine, but if not, I think it would be clearer to specify that Utee is a B-side. (This comes up again when discussing "Hey Joe"/"51st Anniversary".) – Quadell ^(talk) 20:33, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

As far as I know, this is an accepted convention, but I could omit the b-side here for the sake of simplicity, though in other instances I think its better to retain the information. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Does this edit resolve your concern? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:52, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Yes, quite, though it's still an issue in the first sentence of the "US success" section. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:49, 31 December 2013 (UTC)

• Through Gypsy Eyes has an ISBN, 978-0752827254. I think it'd be useful, even if the book isn't used as a source.
  • Added to further reading. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 19:13, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• "as Johnny Hallyday's support act" – Do you mean "supporting act" (Opening act)?

Yes, that's what I meant. Nice catch, thanks. Fixed. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 19:21, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Great. I made the same change here as well. – Quadell ^(talk) 20:33, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Thanks! GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• Comment: The London press calling Hendrix the "Black Elvis" is hi-lar-ious. (No change needed.)

• In nb 19, I'm not sure what "four-track technology" means. If you mean Stereo-Pak, RCA tape cartridge, Quadraphonic sound, or Multitrack recording, then a link would be useful.

Link added. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• Learner001 recently added a direct quote, sourced to the DVD The Sixties. But I'm not sure who is being quoted. It's a strong statement. Was it the assessment of someone notable? I'm trying to determine if the quote merits inclusion or not.

Right, its also lacking a location for the event. I've started a discussion with them at their talk page, so hopefully we can get an answer about the speaker and the location. Otherwise, I think I'll just remove it, as it strikes me a bit like revisionist puffery. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:16, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

• There's an after-before-after situation in this sentence: "After the festival, the Experience played a series of concerts at Bill Graham's Fillmore, with Big Brother and the Holding Company and Jefferson Airplane, before replacing the latter at the top of the bill after embarrassing them musically." I assume the Experienced replaced Jefferson Airplane in the middle of the series of concerts, not once the concert series was done? And I'm not sure what "after embarrassing them musically" means; is it that the Experience was so much better? I think it would be useful to reword this sentence somehow.
  • Does this edit resolve your concern? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 21:37, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

    Yes, great. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:49, 31 December 2013 (UTC)

• In the captions for two adjacent sound files, each says it "demonstrates Hendrix's cutting-edge use of" something. It would be an improvement to add variety to the wording. – Quadell ^(talk) 16:11, 31 December 2013 (UTC)

I'll continue reading and reviewing this tomorrow. – Quadell ^(talk) 21:17, 29 December 2013 (UTC)

Will you be able to do a source review as well, Quadrell? For now I'll just request an image review at WT:FAC (which might generate some further interest in the nom as well). Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:40, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Yes, sure. – Quadell ^(talk) 14:57, 30 December 2013 (UTC)

Image review

• Pedal caption shouldn't end in period
  • Fixed. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:42, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
• File:Bertran_Philander_Ross_Hendrix_and_Zenora_"Nora"_Rose_Hendrix.jpg: when/where was this first published?
  • I have no idea, but its my understanding that due to its age, its a PD image. Am I wrong about this? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:42, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
    • Outside comment: Since Nora and Ross Hendrix were Vaudeville performers and photographs were relatively expensive back then, I think it extremely unlikely that this photo would have gone unpublished for decades. It is very unlikely that this image could still be copyrighted; it would be a strange collection of circumstances indeed that could cause that. It would strengthen the claim if we could find any information about who took the photograph or when it was made available for viewing or published, but I can't find any info online, even using newspaper archives. In my opinion, it's safe to assume this c. 1910 publicity photo is PD. – Quadell ^(talk) 16:11, 31 December 2013 (UTC)
    • As Quadell says, it's unlikely that this is still under copyright, but it's pre-1923 publication, not creation, that would make it PD. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:35, 31 December 2013 (UTC)
      • Well, okay, but the source of the image (blackpast.org) claims that it is PD, and it was used as such in an article written by Janie Hendrix, so is that good enough, or no? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:41, 31 December 2013 (UTC)
• File:Jimihendrix1969mug.jpg: not seeing a strong rationale for use of this image. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:37, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Are you suggestion that I need to tighten-up the FUR, or that even with a better FUR the image should not be included? GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:42, 30 December 2013 (UTC)
    • Outside comment: In my opinion, this non-free image fails NFCC#8. We already have images to show what Hendrix looked like, and all the other encyclopedic information in this image can be (and is) conveyed through the text. – Quadell ^(talk) 16:11, 31 December 2013 (UTC)
    • I'm suggesting that I do not anticipate a FUR capable of justifying the inclusion of this image. It's possible, but unlikely. Nikkimaria (talk)
      • Image removed. GabeMc ^{(talk|contribs)} 16:41, 31 December 2013 (UTC)