Talk:Harlow Fire/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Penitentes (talk · contribs) 15:05, 30 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 20:46, 24 December 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this review. On first glance, it looks very close to GA quality already. However, since I know the holiday season can be busy for many, just keep me updated if you'll need more than a week to make any changes. Please use {{done}}, {{not done}}, etc to respond to my comments. (Some comments may go beyond the GA criteria - they are recommendations to improve the article but I will not insist on them.) Thanks, Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:46, 24 December 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• In the infobox, the start and end dates can be on a single line.
• I would use California rather than Central California, especially in the infobox, as the former is a legally defined state and the latter is an inconsistently-defined unofficial designation.
• Per MOS:DATESNO, no comma between month and year.
• The lede should be expanded with about two more sentences: one detailing other effects of the fire (injuries and longer-term effects), and one detailing the investigation.
• Since you created the extraordinary File:1961 Harlow Fire.png, would it be possible to export the fire's footprint as geoJSON to use with {{mapframe}} or similar?

Background

• Link to Droughts in California somewhere in this section
• I would link "fire season" to Climate of California#Wildfires

Progression

• morning on --> morning of
• It is possible to give the nearest town to the origin of the fire?
• I think the July 12 source may be mistaken about the name of the mountain - it appears to be Stumpfield Mountain on both contemporary and modern maps.
• I recommend linking to Ahwahnee and Nipinnawasee in their first mentions in this section.
• Link directly to Chowchilla River#East Fork
• I've asked about the "AJ3" at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Military history#AJ3 Tiger?. I suspect it was a significant enough typo on the reporter's part that we won't be able to identify it, but we shall see.
• Link to Coarsegold, California
• Link to Oakhurst, California
• I recommend adding some images to the article. The July 13 Fresno Bee and July 12 Madera Tribune have good images and no copyright notice, so any/all those images could be uploaded to Commons as PD-US-not renewed.

Effects

• Link to Bass Lake (Madera County, California)
• Add {{inflation}} for the $71,000
• Add "also" after "establishments"
• Add {{convert}} for the 22 tons
• I would consider whether to move the second-to-last paragraph to the following section (and retitle that as "Investigation"). It might flow a bit better.

Other

• Remove the first entry from the See also section
• Sources 23 and 26 don't need "www.fire.ca.gov" - that's redundant to the publisher.
• Source check: 2, 11, 17, 22, and 39 all pass verification.