Wikipedia:Peer review/Bruce Lehrmann/archive1

Bruce Lehrmann

I've listed this article for peer review because I'm seeking feedback on how it can be improved prior to nominating it as a good article.

Thanks, TarnishedPath^talk 10:09, 12 December 2024 (UTC)

Comments from Z1720

@TarnishedPath: Comments after a quick skim:

• Suggest adding images or other media to the article. This can include an image of where alleged incidents took place.
• I think the lede needs a little more information.
• "where he began his political career." Needs a citation.
• "Cameron, Sarah; McAllister, Ian; Jackman, Simon; Sheppard, Jill. "THE 2022 AUSTRALIAN FEDERAL ELECTION"" Per MOS:ALLCAPS, this should be in sentence case.
• Quotes are not necessary in references. These should probably be removed.
• Ref 40 and 41 seem to be the same ref. These should be combined.

Once the above are resolved, I think this can be nominated for GAR. Z1720 (talk) 23:19, 19 December 2024 (UTC)

@Z1720, I've completed points 1 and 3 - 6. I'll have a think about how the lead can be expanded after I've read the whole article again. I'm travelling up to family interstate tomorrow. Hopefully I'll have time when I'm up there. If not, I'll come back to this in the new year. TarnishedPath^talk 01:47, 20 December 2024 (UTC)

Ps, thanks for the suggestion about using an image of where the alleged incident took place. I'd spent quite a bit of time searching the net for images of Lehrmann which had been released under a free license and had not found anything. TarnishedPath^talk 01:48, 20 December 2024 (UTC)