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This document provides a summary of errors and deficiencies found in self-learning modules on enhancing and decorating bamboo, wood, and metal products for Grade 6 students. It identifies 14 specific issues across various modules including incorrect syntax, incomplete sentences, vague instructions, redundancy, lack of conciseness and flow. Recommendations are provided such as adding missing words, restructuring sentences, using transitional phrases, completing definitions, and improving consistency and brevity. The purpose is to improve the language, content, and organization of the learning materials.

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Summary of Findings Language Sample

This document provides a summary of errors and deficiencies found in self-learning modules on enhancing and decorating bamboo, wood, and metal products for Grade 6 students. It identifies 14 specific issues across various modules including incorrect syntax, incomplete sentences, vague instructions, redundancy, lack of conciseness and flow. Recommendations are provided such as adding missing words, restructuring sentences, using transitional phrases, completing definitions, and improving consistency and brevity. The purpose is to improve the language, content, and organization of the learning materials.

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Summary of Findings

for DepEd-developed Self-Learning Modules (SLMs)

Learning Area: TLE Grade Level: 6 Quarter No.1

Title of SLMs: Importance and Methods of Enhancing and Decorating Bamboo, Wood and Metal
Products

Instruction: For all NO answers provided in the respective evaluation tools, indicate in this template
the following: specific modules, paragraphs, and pages where the errors/ deficiencies are found
(1st column), the brief description of the errors/deficiencies observed ( 2nd column), the type of
error (3rd column), and the specific recommendations to improve the identified error / deficiency
(4th column). Additional rows may be added as necessary.

Module
Number / Type of Error
Paragraph / Brief Description of (Write C if for
Content, L for Specific Recommendations to Improving Identified Error /
Line / Page Errors/ Findings/ Language, or F Deficiency
number (in Observations for
chronological Layout/Format)
order)
What I
know/Item Missing subject / Error Add the word “processes” between the words
L
no. 5 / Page in Syntax following and that or just omit the word “that”
2
What I
know/Item Subejct and Verb L
Make your subject plural.
no. 10 / Agreement
Page 3
What’s In/
Subejct and Verb L The main verb should be “increases” since the subject
Paragraph 1/
Agreement is singular.
Sentence 3
What’s In/
L Make this phrase more concise : “the possibility that it
Paragraph 1/ Conciseness
can be easily notice or to be eye catching.”
Sentence 3
What’s In/ The two sentences can be joined to make it more
Paragraph 1/ L consice. Suggested changes: “Moreover, it gives the
Conciseness
Sentence 4 product an artistic look and raises the chance of the
and 5 product being bought by the costumers.”
What’s In/
The intruction is rather vauge and confusing.
Activity B/
Vauge Instructions / L Suggested change: “ Below are scrambled words that
Directions/
Error in Syntax corresponds to the given definition beside it. Arrange
Sentence
these scrambled words to form the correct words.”
1/Page 5
What’s In/ Incomplete sentences /
Activity B/ The items don’t follow L Complete the sentences by adding “it” or “This
Items 1-5/ the proper way to process” and add a punctiation mark
Page 5 define a word.
The paragraph doesn’t
What’s new /
have a smooth flow / It L Use transitional devices. Insert the word “however”
Pragraph 1 /
has an organization between the two sentences.
Page 5
flaw / Error in Syntax
What’s
The paragraph doesn’t
New / You can join the first and sencond paragraph. Then,
have a smooth flow / It L
Paragraph 1 omit all the words before the word “why” and add
has an organization
and 2 “Renato wonders”.
flaw
/ Page 5
What’s Run-on Senteces L You can make the first sentence a two sentences. Put
New / a period after the word “marketability”.
Paragraph
3/
Sentence 1 /

Page 1 of 4
page 5
What is it/
L
Items A and Paralellism Find a word that would make both terms parallel
B / page 6
What is it/
Paragraph 1/ Subject and Verb L
Add “-s” in the word “product”
Sentece 1 / agreement
page 6
What is it/
Paragraph 1/ Missing Comma and L Add comma after the word decorated. Then, change
Sentece 2 / Conciseness the verb “is” to becomes.
page 6
What is it/
Paragraph 1/ L
Redundancy Omit the last paragraph
Sentece 3 /
page 6
What is it/
Paragraph 2/ The sentence is rather L Add “what kind of materials are to be used” after the
Sentece 1 / incomplete word “on”
page 6
What is it/
Paragraph 2/ L Add the function word “that” after the word
Missing function words
Sentece 2 / “community”
page 6
What is it/ Make the sentence more consice and organize it.
Paragraph 2/ Conciseness and L Suggested change: “Durability can also be achieved by
Sentece 3 / organization of thought enhancing and decoratign the product with innovative
page 6 finishing materials.
What is it/
Paragraph 3/ L
Redundancy Omit the last paragraph
Sentece 1 /
page 6
L You can make the first sentence a two sentences. Put
Run-on Sentence
What is it/ a period after the word “used”
Paragraph 4/ The thought of the sentence is rather vague.
Sentece 1 / Organaization of L Suggested change : “Moreover, workmanship and
page 6 thought creativity can satisfy your client that would eventually
lead to more profit.”
What is it/
Paragraph 6/ L
Sentence Fragment Add a subject of complete the thought of the sentence
Sentece 2 /
page 6
What is it/
Items 2, 4, 6, L Since the first definition follows a standard format, do
Consitency
/ Sentece 2 / the same for the succeeding methods
page 7
What is it/
Item 7, / L
Word Choice Change “varieties” into types
Sentece 2 /
page 8
What is it/
Item 7, / Word choice / Subject- L
Change thephrase “a variety of” into “many different”
Sentece 1 / Verb Agreement
page 8
What is it/
Item 7, / L
Word Choice Change the word “lacquer finish” into varnish
Sentece 2 /
page 8
What is it/
Item 1 under
Enhancing Fragmented Definition / L Add “is a method of” after the concept that is being
metal / Consistency defined
Sentece 2 /
page 8
What is it/ There’s a flaw in the L Use transitional devices
The Etching organization of the

Page 2 of 4
process
Give a short description for the following words:
process/
L -recessed
page 9 Word Choice
-dampened
-Impressions
What is it/
Item 3 and 4
under Complete the definition by adding appropriate
Fragmented Definition / L
Enhancing preliminary phrases like “utilizes the use of” and the
Consistency
metal / like
Sentece 1 /
page 9
What’s
More/
L Change the phrase “Many people have the tendency”
Activity 1/ Consitency and Brevity
into “People prefer”
Item no. 1 /
Page 10
What’s
More/
L Complete the sentences by adding whether a subject,
Activity 2/ Fragmented Sentences
function words, or demonstrative pronouns
Item no. 1 -
10/ Page 10
What’s
More/
L An infinitive is composed of the preposition to + the
Activity 2/ Wrong use of infinitives
base form of the verb
Item no. 6/
Page 11
More/
Activity 2/ Word choice / L Change the word “variety” into “different kind” or
Item no. 8/ Organization of thought “different”
Page 11
What I have
learned/ Item L
Error in Syntax Remove the phrase “_to against harsh elements”
no. 3 / page
11
What I have
learned/ Item Misplaced Comma / L Remove the preposition of. Add a comma after the
no. 4 / page Error in Syntax word “markers”
11
What I can
do/
Missing Commas and L Add the article “a” before the word “project” and
Paragraph
articles comma after the word “wood”
1/Sentence
1/ page 12
What I can Insert the phrase “that talks” before the word “about”
Error in syntax / L
do/ Item no and add the demonstrative pronoun “that” after the
Missing funtion words
2/ page 12 word “method”
Assessemen
L Put a perio after the word “answer” and make the
t/ Directions/ Run-on Sentence
remaining words into a sentence.
Page 12
“What” is used when Given this context, it more appropriate to use the word
Assessemen
the answer to a L which. Thus, it wou;d be better if the sentence starts
t/ Item no 1/
question is infinite or with the phrase “Which among the following
Page 12
has many possibilities. statements talks about...”
Assessemen
L
t/ Item no 2/ Wrong use of article Omit the word “the” or change it into “a”
Page 12
Assessemen
L
t/ Item no 4/ Missing Comma Add a comma after the word gouges
Page 13
Assessemen Misplaced function Remove the suffix -s in the word techniques and omit
L
t/ Item no 5/ words / Subject-verb also the word “that”. Then, change the phrase “resulted
Page 13 agreement to” into “to achieve”
Assessemen
L
t/ Item no 6/ Duplicated Question Make another question
Page 13

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