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Ticket Id: 23830

18/02/2019

Ms Jane Graham
Occupational Therapist
Newtown Occupational Therapy
10 Johnston St
Newtown

Dear Ms Graham,
Re: Mr Barry Jones D.O.B.:01/04/1972

I am writing to refer Mr Jones, a 44- year-old male whose signs and symptoms are suggestive of severe
lower back strain, for further assessment.

Mr Jones is married with three children. He works as a forklifter in a large warehouse which requires
prolonged sitting and sometime heavy-lifting as well. His current medications include Naproxen and Commented [S1]: sometimes
Carisoprodol. Commented [S2]: naproxen
Commented [S3]: carisoprodol
On 21/03/15, Mr Jones presented with complaint of pain in the back after lifting heavy box over the last 4 Commented [S4]: a
days. There was not any disc problems on the X-ray. Therefore, he was advised to do exercise and was Commented [S5]: a
prescribed Naproxen as well as Carisoprodol. In addition, he was recommended one month rest as well. Commented [S6]: were
Commented [S7]: no
On his subsequent visits, Mr Jones was still suffering from pain despite attending regular appointments of Commented [S8]: naproxen
physiotherapy. Thus, his Naproxen dose was increased. Commented [S9]: carisoprodol
Commented [S10]: of
Today, although Mr Jones was recovering well along with improvements in range of movements, he was Commented [S11]: naproxen
still having pain. Moreover, the pain was increased after sitting of 20-30 minutes. Please note, the patient Commented [S12]: the
was feeling bore, restless and he wanted to return to the work. Commented [S13]: for
Commented [S14]: bored
In light of the above, it would be greatly appreciated if you could do assessment of his workplace and Commented [S15]: an
advise him regarding the duties which he can perform.

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have any queries.

Yours faithfully,
Doctor
Report
Word length 220
Comments Although this letter presented the information in a
logical manner, several structural errors were
observed, which somewhat hindered effective
communication.
Estimated Grade C+
Advice 1. Be as concise as possible.
2. Focus on improving grammar skills.
3. Adhere to the rules of capitalization.
4. Try to construct more linguistically coherent
sentences.
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practice-tests
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correction
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